Qwertyuiopasd's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Picard Song]

I see good concepts...

the art of course needed work, I would have work on getting a better sound quality version of the song, too.

I wouldn't let something stay on screen without moving that much... like your people, they could have moved limbs around a little, or even have PIcard just sort of look around, have some facial expression changes simply by tweening eyes, mouth, and eyebrows.

the actual jokes were funny, but like with the hypnotic spinny thing, you could ahve had that fade in over the words, and then have like when the people were spinning, have them move around the screen, getting smaller and larger, all while still spinning in that one direction. and then you can have both people spinning around.

it was good when there was something in the song, like the truth speech, the love speech, or the Hypnotic speech, but for the 'choruses' for the animation, there needed to be more variation.

I did like the thing you did with the kick in the latter half.

this may very well get blammed due to evil people on NG and the admitably sub-par animation, but don't be dishearted. A) NG is a cruel place, B) your jokes are funny, just work on the art.

also, look for shortcuts. you could always have drawn Picards head and shoulder instead, thereby making him look more normal, and spending more time on facial movements and such, and then for the hypnotic moving part, just have his head moving around, which can be even funnier, if done right.

all in all, good, but you may have to re-do this.

5/5

~Qwerty

CorellonL responds:

Damn, that was helpful. Thanks, mate. I'll definitely work on the art this weekend.

[TANKMEN 2]

I wasn't gonna review

but I have to mention what I noticed the second time around.

on the wide shot of the tower with the sniper, I love how there's this giant aircraft carrier ship in the background. I like little jokes in animations like that.

5/5

~Qwerty

[Dark Pendulum [Prologue]]

You're my new best friend.

I was surprised to see my song was used in a flash. it's kind of a weird way to watch an animation, but hey, apparently it worked. I like where the story seems to be going. the sprites are good. as far as this animation itself as a movie...

Voice actors are always good. Good ones can be hard to find, but make sure people know you're looking. and if you're going to do text, perhaps have different people use different color texts, and use speach bubbles or something. at least, that's what I'd do.

also, it needs a better ending slide. the switching between words and action made for good tension, but then it just kind of goes to a black screen. something with better timing and "TBC" would be good.

but, do wahtever you want, I'm just giddy that you used my song. :D can I create anything else for your story? :P

5/5

~Qwerty

Tancuras responds:

Look at me, I finally figured out how to add a golden-text review reply :D

Anyway, thanks a ton for the rating, I really wasn't expecting this to get a 3 =/ It was so short I didn't have room to use the full potential of my resources, and it was a bit rushed (3 days), I was just happy to get SOMETHING uploaded.

I am planning to get voice actors, but lip-syncing with sprites is going to be hard. The series has a depthful storyline, meaning lots of speech. But lots of action, too :) Episode 1 is going to rock your socks if you liked this one, don't worry.

And, hey, if you've got a voice, maybe you could help me a bit with that >P

[Multikulturelt]

seems like it could be funny

it could easily be funny. it probably is funny. however, I'm going to bet that most NG reviewers aren't scandinavian. at the very least, give us some english subtitles, so we can enjoy it too. instead of trying to imagine what he's saying....

~Qwerty

[MRIS Intro Preview]

Eh.

it's alright, but it's really too short to tell what you're trying to do. you're generally not supposed to upload unfinished things, so I wouldn't expect this to survive very long. I'm sure the end result will be good though.

and if you're going to upload something unifinished, you could at least have an ending, instead of simply letting the song continue with absoloutely no animation.

0/5

~Qwerty

hamsamblin responds:

Thanks for the feedback, made the change you suggested about ending it... sorry bout that.

[Everything You Know Is Wrong]

Very good ideas and animation in there!

You truly impress me. pop out another Weird Al movie and I'll probably put you on my favourites.

You should do Pentiums, maybe Bob, and for a slight challange, Trapped in the Drive-Thru. :D

You've got the touch!

(you got the power!)

doo doo... dee dooo....

um

5/5

~Qwerty

[Aladdin 3150]

Epic enough for ya???

Not majestic enough? dear god man, you're not Adam Philips. You could be though, with much more practice and professional training.

[LOL SPOILERS]

but it's not just the animation that's important. the story was just perfect. yeah, it's not Aladdin with sci fi stuff, but it's clearly an Aladdin character. the people he fought were very well done, and I liked the ambiance of the city (with the different people and the flying carpet and the fight and everything.

the only thing was that I didn't quite get why those three guys were after him at the end. all I could figure out was that he stole the necklace from them? but that seems to be an awful lot for a necklace. also, shouldn't they recognize and maybe not want to murder the princess? But, it worked. it worked very well... I can easily see, even in his, um, lizard form, the pain from knowing it's pretty much his fault she's dead.

so there's that one little plot... discrepancy, but it's sort of necessary. just remember sometimes subtle things aren't as clear to your audience as you might think.

the only lag I noticed might've been when the knife-dude at the end went at the lizard and it was sort of slo-motion. but, whether it was lag or intentional, it looked good. Perhaps the lag disappears on a better computer.

all in all, keep practicing, keep learning, try working on stuff without a deadline to see how good you can get.

just my... $2.50 XD

~Qwerty

[:Endless:Pilot:]

pretty clean animation, good enviroments

I enjoyed the animation style, and it went well with the characters.

who were... let's see... angel versus demon or devil-like thing. possibly the actually entities of good and evil, but probably just some form of high ranking avatars.

and then... who?

very good cliffhanger. makes me really wanna know what the hells going on.

~Qwerty